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The Quiet Patient


The Quiet Patient

Dorothy Weiss - or Dr. Weiss, as she preferred to be called - was a controversial figure to many. Upon reading an article about women who charged men to cuddle with them, Dr. Weiss was quick to build a reputation by applying those methods to the psychological treatment of patients.

She claimed that, once the initial awkwardness of the situation had been overcome, cuddling with her patients provided them with an added sense of security and emotional support that allowed them to open up to her more easily than through traditional therapy methods, where emotional barriers between doctors and patients were more rigidly placed. And remarkably, because there were still formal rules in place to preserve professionalism and the ethical aspects of psychological treatment, she found those therapy sessions to constantly generate more value to her patients than anything she had come across in her experience.

Of course, It didn't take long for the controversial aspects of Dr. Weiss' 'cuddling therapy' method to emerge as a topic of heated debate, first within the academic world and soon after by mainstream media, which transformed her almost overnight into a celebrity. Dr. Weiss was invited to participate in numerous radio talk shows and TV programs, was interviewed by a wide range of magazines seeking her views on topics ranging from the feminist movement to her preferences when it came to cosmetics, and saw herself caught in the middle of a bidding war between publishing companies seeking to secure the rights to the book she had not yet begun writing.

Some praised her courage to try and innovate in a notoriously traditional field. Others viewed her as an opportunist who took advantage of her attractiveness - and Dr. Weiss was indeed a very attractive woman in her mid-forties - to more easily prey on the inner sexual fantasies of men while being able to justify the premium price tag attached to her so-called 'treatment.'

A few months went by before the intense wave of interest on Dr. Weiss begun dissipating - and Dorothy thought this was a good thing, as she had grown tired of having her professional commitments control her entire life. And regardless of the level of media interest, she continued to be arguably the most sought after Psychologist in New York City.

Little did she know however that her profession was about to take a stronger hold of her life than ever before.

It had all begun in a beautiful morning, when her unusually efficient assistant, Linda, had welcomed Dr. Weiss to the office by telling her about a strange call from an unidentified woman asking to set up an appointment for someone she would only refer to as Mr. Black. The woman apparently would not accept the fact that Dr. Weiss had no appointments available, insisting rather aggressively that she had been instructed to set up an appointment for Mr. Black and that money was not a problem.

"The only thing the woman said other than that was that there are two rules Mr. Black wants respected," said Linda. "First, that the meetings are not going to happen here, but at a hotel room picked by him. Second, that you are not to initiate any conversations with him during the sessions. Weird, huh?"

Yes, that was indeed rather weird.

"Ah, and she left a number she can be reached at," said Linda, while extending a piece of paper with a handwritten number to Dr. Weiss.

Dr. Weiss wanted to forget about that call. She had a bad feeling about it. And yet, she seemed unable to do so during the days that followed.

Who was that man?

If money was no objection, he must have been quite a successful individual. Perhaps he was a leading business person? Maybe a public figure or a celebrity? That would explain the exaggerated need for privacy... Or was the man perhaps ashamed of being seen seeking professional psychological help - or at least the kind of psychological help Dr. Weiss was now famous for?

Who was that man?

Dr. Weiss saw herself almost forced to return Mr. Black's phone call. And one morning, she finally did.

"Hello Dr. Weiss, thank you for returning the call I made on behalf of Mr. Black," responded a feminine, robotic-like voice. "Mr. Black will be waiting for you tonight, at 8 pm, at the Royal Plaza Hotel."

And that was it: the woman had hung up before Dr. Weiss could even say 'hello'.

Dr. Weiss didn't move for about five minutes.

"This is beyond ridiculous," she thought. "Screw this bitch! Screw Mr. Black, whoever the hell you are! You are not manipulating me!"

But even as those thoughts raged through her mind, she knew she was now more intrigued with the situation than ever before. She wished she had been able to dismiss the whole thing when Linda first informed her about that weird call. But even if she was not yet ready to admit it to herself, she knew she needed to be at Royal Plaza Hotel that evening.

It was almost 8 PM when Dr. Weiss directed herself to the hotel registration desk.

"Ah, Dr. Weiss, pleasure to see you. Mr. Black awaits you in room 1513. Here are the keys to the room," said the man behind the counter, with too obvious a fake smile.

Dr. Weiss opened the door for room 1513 to find it barely lit. Nevertheless, while looking around the room, she managed to notice a masculine silhouette sited by the window.

Dr. Weiss began saying something but the man quickly indicated she should not speak.

"Listen closely. You will not speak unless spoken to. You will not touch the light switches. You will lie down with your back turned to me and you will not turn around unless I ask you to. You will not try to look at my face. As our session comes to an end, I will leave first. You will wait 10 minutes, and only after that will you leave. Not abiding by either of these rules will mean an end to our treatment, however abruptly it may be," said a deep masculine voice.

"Well, so much so for the two rules being the only ones, I guess," Dr. Weiss responded, trying to show confidence.

The man continued in silence.

"You do understand the rules I have for treating my patients, do you not?" she asked him.

The man responded he did understood her rules, assuring her that his interest in meeting with her was strictly for therapeutic purposes.

He then signaled to her to lie down in bed. She obeyed. She sensed the man approach the bed from behind her back. He lied down next to her, and she liked the way he smelled. She nervously waited for his touch. But that first touch never happened. They both remained there, lying in bed together, inches from one another, without a touch, without a word, and, in his case, without a name.

The alarm clock soon signaled the end of their time together. The man stood up, said "same time and place next week" and left the room.

Surely that man had to say something at some point, thought Dr. Weiss. And so there she was again, at the same time, lying in the same bed, the following week.

And yet, again, no word, no touch.

And the same happened the week after that. And then over the course of the following month.

Dr. Weiss' curiosity to uncover the man's identity or why he sought her for treatment quickly mounted. She now had him constantly hanging around on the back of her mind, haunting her, daring her to break his rules. She soon begun waking up in the middle of her sleep with the feeling someone was lying next to her. And she dreamed about him too.

She recognized she needed to do something about that situation, it simply could not continue that way for much longer. But she feared breaking any of the man's rules and jeopardizing the possibility of having her questions answered, however slim that possibility seemed. And of course, she was a professional: she knew she had to respect her patient's boundaries.

If playing the 'silence' game was what he wanted, than that is what she would keep doing. And she would make sure she played that game better than he did. She knew she could, she reassured herself.

But could she?

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Fletcher @fletcherrhoden
This seems like a great plot for a whole novel, not merely a short story. I'm thinking back to the work of Danielle Steele or some of the 90s authors, like Carl Hiacynth, or the writer who always wrote about the nurses in peril. Anyway, the pitch was a bit slow, but the plot itself seems crackin'. I'd take it long-form, then write the screenplay.
Chris @chrisgrigsby
First off, you have a very compelling writing style. The other reviewers were right to say you have a good idea for a novel. I'd say it could be a screenplay too depending on what winds up happening. That being said, I'd like to have a few more details on Dr. Weiss and her methods. Is she a real doctor? Is there any academic support for her work? Does she just ignore the critics or attempt to justify herself? Is it even legal to see a patient without any of their personal information? She's crossing a LOT of ethical boundaries both with this sort of therapy and agreeing to meet a secret man in a hotel room for a session. It seems like she should have enough money being a wealthy celebrity psychologist to not need to risk her career (and life?) doing that. I'd like to see another plot point that explains why this meeting appeals to her personal side, because her professional side should seem able to stifle curiosity enough to stay away from that hotel room. That being said, I am intrigued. I want to know who Mr. Black is and what's going to happen to her. It's an engaging plot and obviously some of my questions would be answered in any finished work. Good job
ace @xoxosolana
Lillian @Lilly

I AGREE!!!!!!!

Marie @mariemarvelou
Yeah, I agree the story is indeed a nice plot for a novel. I like the story, it's so intriguing and mysterious. I like to read more about this story.
lionel @lionelwalfish
Very unique concept of psychiatric tending. Story line is great! Totally original! Good job! Leaves the reader wanting more!
Carlos @carlos

Thanks, Lionel!

Patrick @patrickprasquier
I expect you'll provide us with an end that'll meet the high expectations generated by the plot so far. But will you?..
Nitheesh @bookmagnet
I love your writing style and the way you build up the suspense.The characters are intriguing too, Please do make this into a series...can't wait :)
Nitheesh @bookmagnet

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Carlos @carlos

Thank you, Nitheesh! I am planning on breaking this up into a longer series. Just need time :) See more

Koshi @koshididdi
good job! Pls read my story "Everyone has a story"
Lillian @Lilly
You have a creative plot, and a logical mind. You could go far in life. Here's some advice for publishers:PUBLISH THIS!!!
Spartangurl @Spartangurl
i kinda need this to be a full novel, where and how can we get this in full?
Carlos @carlos

Thanks Spartangurl! I actually have been thinking about making this a series here - just need the See more

Aisharya @aish0003
The best plot ever
Carlos @carlos

Thank you, Aisharya! :)

Carlos @carlos

Thank you, Aisharya! :)

Carlos @carlos

Thank you, Aisharya! :)

Wayna @Amour Francais
Amazing! You inspire me! Thumbs up for me and my friends!
Carlos @carlos

Thank you :)

Syndi @Syndi
Please don't be angry at me! But I think I have read this story before... Or the idea of it (or something... Sorry I'm too excited to even make sense here). I read it from a Greek mythology: the story of Eros and Psyche. Yup! That's the one :) --- I like it (the mystery itself and I doubt he is not Eros hahahaha)!
Carlos @carlos

There's no reason to be angry :) In the end most stories are similar to each other if you think a See more

Syndi @Syndi

I'm self-confessed geek @carlos (I'm replying to your reply... Okay, THAT does not make any sense See more

Kim @Arkin27
Next chapter please.. :)
Cece @cecewinter
wow this is fantastic! absolutely too intriguing to just stay as it is! please write more or direct me to where thre is already a sequel to this absolutely inspiring mystery. I mst know who is! is he a crazed man who has sick fantasies while lying in bed with the doctor or maybe a lonely man ith a loss bearin down on his conscious?!?!?!?!?!?! please I just gota know!
Carlos @carlos

Thanks Cece!
Yes, those are two intriguing possibilities for Mr. Black. But perhaps it coul See more

Amae @Amae
Interesting start!
Nay-Nay @Baby-Joker
disania @clutoinpf
next chapter please! this is realllllly exciting! i hope the story is as amazing as the starting...good luck!
Toni @tonimerflag
Lots of telling. Not much showing. The characters are more like stick figures than real people. Needs work.
Camden @TheMemeKing
hey guys how do you upload a photo?????also great story by the way
Hyunsun @hyunsunpark
This is a very original idea and I'd love to see it more fleshed out. There are a few grammatical issues, but nothing that a second editing would not solve. Again, I personally would love to see how the relationship between Dr. Weiss and her patient would become.